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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Mya! Itís nice to read some of your stuff again, as I havenít read any in a while :)

I really loved the idea of the award ceremony, as Iíve never seen that done before, and itís really fitting considering the Oscars are on tonight!

I thought your description of Raoul kissing her was great, and they were so well done, it was as if he was kissing me! It was interesting that you made him a player, as you wouldnít have assumed that Percyís daughter would get themselves involved with someone like him, but it was funny twist.

I thought it was a nice twist that he was her boss, as it adds more tension, drama and excitement. I almost thought that they were going to have sex then, as it was built up really well. Then Lucy became all girl power, and told him to stop. I was internally cheering for her! I was so proud of her, and just wanted to say ĎYou go girlí!

So Raoul won best head of department then? If only they knew! And Draco was the minister of magic! Iíve never seen that done before, that itís slightly odd that he would be, as I would have thought Percy would have been a better one, it was funny. Then Lucy was his girlfriend I didnít expect that!

Now for some CCís! I have a little Brit pick! You said Mom when it should be Mum. There were quite a few grammar issues, which did disrupt from the flow at times as you had to read over it again. I think the first paragraph had the most issues, and the last sentence was a little confusing as well, as you said she, but I didnít know who the she referred to. I assumed it was Lucy but as it was told in first person throughout, that meant I was confused.

I thought it was an interesting one-shot, it just needs to be proof read. It would be cool to see some follow up to this though:)


Author's Response: Hey Kiana!

Im glad you liked the story =)

I'll re read it as soon as possible. I really need to start reading my stories again ahha. I always forget.

oo! Whoopsie! Sorry not actually British :P It kinda slips out sometimes!

Thanks for the review!


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