I started reading your story a few days ago, and ive fallen in love with it! Ive read alot of Jily fics and while some are really good, not a single one is as awesome or well written as yours.
Your characterization is spot on. I really love how you've given Remus and Peter such a major role too, and not just focused on James and Sirius. One thing that i especially liked was the line in one of the previous chapters about how Peter was always there for his friends and could be trusted. It's a small detail but it tells us how James and Lily could have trusted him with being their secret keeper. I also love that you've made all the characters so layered, Sirius in particular. I hate when he's portrayed as an immature playboy all the time, i always felt there was more to him.
I also love how you took things slow with James and Lily. A lot of fics rush into it and in the process it doesnt seem at all believable. Also, the fact that they had been friends on and off for the past few years was a nice touch.
Belle's story is captivating, and i cant wait to see how the meeting with her family goes! And Lily and James' vacation too.
Another thing i absolutely loved was the varying POVs. Bellatrix, Regulas, the Order meetings, all of it was so well written! Bellatrix's devotion to Voldemort is so interesting to read about, it really explains her future actions.
Also, the fact that you've given so much importance to the friendships, especially between Lily and the rest of the Marauders, is lovely. I enjoyed reading those scenes immensely.
I envy your descriptive skills. Your writing is flawless and so poetic, and i can vividly see everything you've described in my mind's eye. No doubt, some of the credit goes to your beta reader, whose stories i will definitely be checking out!
Btw, will this story cover all the events leading upto their deaths or just their seventh year?
Most of all, i love that you have superlong chapters! And each chapter is better than the last. I cant wait for the next chapter and to see how the plot progresses.
I know that in this ridiculously long review i have given no constructive criticism whatsoever, but ive found next to nothing to criticise in the whole story, save for a typos.
Keep up the good work and update son! :D (yes, im finally done :P)
Author's Response: Hi limelight!! I can't tell you how happy it makes me that you're enjoying this! Your compliments about this just have me on cloud nine. Thank you so much ♥
Giving Remus and Peter real parts in this all, and not just the tag along friends, is really something that's important to me. Just like you said, they trust Peter enough in the future to make him the secret keeper, so we know that he wasn't just the left out abandoned friend.
The varying view points are so much fun for me to write. I'm so excited that you enjoy those. I think it will make for a really fun transition into book two!
Ahh I can't even tell you how much your compliments about my writing mean to me. I'm just going to sit over here with a huge smile on my face :D Yes, my beta is awesome! He gets out all my pesky typos, and helps me thinks through parts that I get stuck on, and calms me down when I want to throw my computer :P Poor guys has a lot of pressure... haha!
This story is book one of two. It ends at the end of 7th year, then there will be a second book that goes through all their time into the Order and leads up to their (tear) death :(. I originally planned for it to all be one book, but I realized that it would have gotten WAY too long, haha!
Ahh I'm so relieved you like the long chapters. I know that some people prefer the 2,00 word ones, but those feel like you barely get started and then it's over!
You really made my day with this review, thank you so much! I always update once a week, so the next chapter will be posted on Saturday :)!
Thank you again so much!