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Review:blueirony says:
So, um.

Better late than never?

Gulp.

Yes. I know it's been almost a year... or more like eight months. And I suppose eight months is better than a full twelve months but it's still... yeah. At least I'm here. It's better than nothing! I tell people that I promise to never forget about them and I don't. So here I am.

You know what I like about your writing? You don't over-dramatise it. There are so many stories which really build up to a kiss and while they do keep me on the edge of my seat and keep me clicking "next chapter", it's nice that the kiss between Anthony and Lily was nothing special. It happened, they sort of laughed over it and that's the end of that. I think that more closely resembles how it is in real life than in movies where you the entire plot leads up to a kiss. I like that.

I liked this chapter! Lol, trust you to put your beloved soccer into it. And, yes, it is called soccer. Not football. :P I also liked that you didn't give us a play-by-play rundown of the entire game. It tends to not add too much to the story unless the sport is pivotal to the story. And I liked it in this. It was nice.

I wonder who the person is that Lily saw! I don't know who it could be. And I won't bother guessing because I suck at that type of thing. Should be interesting to see, though.

A lovely two chapters!

Jasmine :)

Author's Response: No worries - I'm about three months late responding to this. I understand how RL can get. Thank you so much for getting to me now. :)

I'm glad you liked the kiss - I think that there's definitely a time and a place for a crazy build up, but that it often isn't really necessary. I mean, sometimes kisses just happen, you know? They're not always a big deal.

I'm also glad that you felt like I balanced the description of the game well. I know that most people aren't in love with the sport like I am, and I didn't want to overdo it.

Thank you for the review! :)


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