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Review:Jchrissy says:
Great. I just realized that their are only 9 chapters and this is still a WIP. Which means, weíre going to go back to that relationship where, after I catch up to the last chapter, Iím going to be forcing you to write faster so I can read faster. Right? Well, Iím okay with it if you are ;)!

Al and Lily are the perfect example of siblings right here. You see a lot over dramatized and under dramatized sibling relationships. But this is a really great balance. Sheís a nearly 17 year old girl (and we all thought we had the world figured out when we were nearly 17, didnít we?) and Albus is turing into a really caring man, but heís still her brother. He doesnít seem too sweet in this. Heís worried, but he still acts like a brother and addresses his worry in a very brotherly concern with his lovely opening line :P

I really enjoyed learning more about Scorpiusís and Lilyís past through their conversation, too. It was a great way to fill us in a bit, without actually feeling like youíre filling us in. And Lily mentally comparing Albus to her father was actually really sweet. And I think he does a really good job of bringing her around. That entire first section just really got me curious as to more about what happened in the passed, and if Lily will take her brothers advice or decide that, because she is 17 and knows everything about the world, Scorpius is worth the risk of another broken heart.

I think weíve all been there though. Even if she was so sad that she spent an entire summer in her room crying, it doesnít mean those feelings didnít exist. Theyíre still there, and maybe the memory of her own broken heart is enough to temporarily stop her from going back to Scorpius, but probably not permanently.

That letter was really eerie. Now you have me all creeped out.

Awesome chapter, mídear. Iím excited to get hooked on another one of your stories. And to learn more about Scorpius and Lily and of course how the first chapter ties into it all.

Leave it to you to give me a love story laced in mystery. :P

Author's Response: Hehehe! That would probably be a great thing for me. I've hardly written anything since finishing OtE. I'm in a super funk :P

I'm so glad you liked Lily and Al! I agree, there is definitely a tendency (especially in Next-Gen) to make the sibling relationships super extreme. They either spend every waking hour together or hate each other's guts. Somewhere in the middle seems the most true to life to me.

I oscillated a lot on how much to tell about Lily and Scorpius's past and when. But since this is supposed to be a mystery story, hopefully revealing it slowly doesn't get too tedious. As to Lily's feelings, I know I've been there before, especially at that age. Everything has just a touch more of the "end of the world" feel to it when you're 16.

I'm glad you're liking the story. It's a lot more Potter-esq than OtE, and I'm not sure I'm as attached to it as the other, but I'd really like to see it through to the end. Thanks for the review. I've missed getting reviews from you. You spoiled me way too much!

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