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Review:patronus_charm says:
Why did life have to get in the way, and not let me carrying on reading this story! I will catch up with this eventually, I just have so many other stories to catch up on as well, so it may take a while!

I can totally understand what Helena was going through! I know the feeling of what itís like to run out of books, so I can sympathise with her. We actually have the same reading taste as well, as Iíve read Beowulf, and The Canterbury Tales, and I really enjoyed bother, so perhaps I should check out La divina commedia? Ok enough about our twin book tastes! I really liked that you made Helena read muggle books, as it does seem very fitting, and the fact that you made them fit the time period, is also great, as it just makes the story authentic.

The vocabulary that you use, is so fitting for the time period, and again that just makes the story so much more authentic and believable. I think thatís my biggest issue with Founders era, so many of the stories just have modern slang in them, so itís so nice to find a story where that isnít the case.

I rather like how Helena doesnít fit the stereotype of women of that time. She seems rebellious, and of course educated, I mean she isnít the daughter of Rowena Ravenclaw for nothing. Usually sheís depicted as a flighty and flirty girl, but I have to say I much prefer your portrayal of her. I guess the fact that she is rebellious makes her similar to Venn, as he doesnít want to marry, which makes him unusual. I do wonder who her father is though, and I canít wait to find out who managed to seduce Rowena!

I really love all the little things you include, and I donít appreciate them until you get to your authorís note. Thatís one of the things I loved about JK, as I love Greek and Roman Mythology, so it was fun seeing what people named, and connecting up the meanings behind them. Youíve managed to bring back the fun in this, and I just want to say a thank you for all the time it must have taken in researching this.

I will be back, but probably not as soon as I want it to be, Iím already in love with this story at chapter 3!

Kiana :D

Author's Response: Kiana, love, take your time! I'm pleased as pudding that you're even being so kind as to follow this without being requested to do so, and I'm so happy every time I see a review from you.

I'm glad you liked Helena's book selection. La divina commedia is just the Italian title for The Divine Comedy. I'd highly recommend it, especially the first book, The Inferno. Dante's writing is beautiful, particularly his imagery, and I just really love reading The Inferno.

Founder's stories seem to vary between too much slang and too much formal thee-thou speech. I tried to strike a happy medium, and I'm glad you think I did a decent job with it.

Helena's still a bit flighty, but as you pointed out, she's not super overtly flirty. I wanted her to be rebellious without it being too non-traditional for that time. If you ever feel like I'm pushing the boundaries so much that it's unrealistic, please, do let me know!

Aww, you're welcome! I had fun researching it, and I wish I had time to do more in the later chapters. It's great to hear that it makes the story better and doesn't weigh it down.

I'll hit up your other review soon! Thanks!

-Amanda


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