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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hello again! Thanks so much for re-requesting-I'm really enjoying this story so far.

I loved the underlying mood and tone of darkness and mystery in this chapter. Though it was quite light (the first half, at least) and Eleanor's thoughts were, at times, quite humorous and very seventeen year old girl-ish, I couldn't shake the feeling that something bad was coming. The fact that the war is at the back of everyone's minds at all times made this chapter much more believable and very realistic-a lot of people, when writing Marauders stories, often forget that the first wizarding war is looming-you clearly haven't, which is great.

I love how well defined each of your characters are. Their personalities are shining through and they are all unique and different from one another. I like how Eleanor is feeling quite uncertain about leaving school, as moving on into the adult world can be a very daunting thing-and I think you chose to 'start' this story and a very good place. I'm looking forward to seeing how it escalates.

Eleanor and Sirius' little moment together was perfect-very sweet and showed how protective Sirius can be, and revealed that the two obviously have feelings for each other of some sort. It also told me that Eleanor is-or could be-in danger, and that she needs to be more careful. I'm also loving the contrast Amelia brings to the chapters-she's very lively and upbeat, which makes a nice sort of change from the others. And I liked the way Eleanor described Lily as 'intense.'

Loved this chapter, can't wait to see what happens next.


Author's Response: I felt like a lighter chapter was needed, and i wanted to show that there is a time difference between the first and this chapter. In this one, although they are plagued by the war, they are still children and there still is that hope they hang on to. I also think that Hogwarts during that time (especially their seventh year but i think the war started getting serious for them in their 5th or so year) was dangerous and i think people would have been more politically involved. If you think of what the 70's was like as well, it seemed like everyone then always had a say and wanted to be heard. There seemed to be more of a culture of it and especially in a community that is as small as wizards it would mean that everyone would be affected in some way. Yes, some to a lesser extent but everyone probably knew someone who died, was tortured or something. That was one of the main reasons why i chose to write this story, was to explore the war and its effects it could have. It makes writing a bit difficult because it's exploring a lot of moments and a lot about life but there isn't something that is pulling it together like they have to go and find a killer or they're finding some object.

With that i've been trying to find a balance with it being light hearted and having the war hanging over them through this story which i find it hard because i'm more used to writing angst and more of my chapters seem to have more of that in it. But i'm glad you could see some of their light moments. :P

Thank you so much for this review and your comments! I appreciate you stopping by and reviewing this!

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