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Review:fauxthefox says:
Hi! Faux here for the review swap. Things picked up a lot in the second chapter and I'm loving it (no MacDonald's reference intended).

In the first chapter with such short scenes, it was a bit hard to keep track of all the different characters, but this chapter made it a lot easier to get a good sense of Camille in particular, and if the story continues in the same vein you'll have some really well-developed characters by the end of it. :)

I touched on this in my first review, but I'd like to say again that I'm really glad someone's writing about this, because I can't imagine that wizards wouldn't somehow try to intervene during WWII. The scenes with the Ziegler siblings are very well-written, and clearly well thought-through/historically accurate. I'd honestly be upset if somebody tried to write this kind of story but didn't treat it right. You approach the subject with exactly the right maturity and gravity.

Your writing is clear and clever, and I like it, though I think that this chapter could use a bit more description. Your description of the lighthouse scene was really good, and I'd love to see more of it throughout the story.

I can't wait to read more! I'm getting hooked.
10/10
Faux.

Author's Response: I honestly have no idea how to respond to your review -- it makes me melt into a pile of incoherent feels.

I'm so happy to hear such positive feedback from you on this chapter! Hopefully, you'll continue to think that the characters are developing well. I'm also particularly thankful that you like the scenes with the Ziegler siblings -- they're the ones I worry the most about, because I don't want to get the atmosphere wrong.

Thank you for this review, and for sticking a post for this in story recommendations!


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