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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello again :D I'm back to review your second chapter!

Oh, I think your story and your characters are coming on really nicely! I love that foreboding atmosphere of war hanging over everyone's heads; it's really such a grim image despite Eleanor's light-hearted moments of internal monologue, that this bunch of children, new school-leavers, have to contemplate something so vast and destructive as war. All the students are surprisingly very politically involved; all of them have a very bleak maturity to them - loved the way you described the Marauders' faces as pinched and hard. Sigh. War really makes one grow up fast. I think you've got a nice theme running through your story - loss of innocence, and so far you're really conveying it well in these first two chapters.

Ah, I'm loving your Sirius a lot :) His characterisation is so precise and really canon - the way he's so volatile and how uncontrolled he is in his anger, how protective he is of Eleanor and his friends - he's a wonderfully complex character. Eleanor on the other hand is brave and she does have her moments of recklessness too, I guess - e.g. when she attacked Wilkes without a wand. She's also dryly observant at times, and contemplative. I love that moment between her and Sirius by the lake. It's a very lovely well-written moment that they share together. There's a sense of tranquility to that time, and yet, set against the backdrop of a war, and a wizarding world in chaos and political turmoil, the impermanence of this rare moment of calm is really accentuated.

Anyway, I think you've got quite a wonderful story here. Your characters are very well-realised and detailed and realistic, and Eleanor's narration is lucid, observant and humorous at times, which punctuates the prevailing bleak mood of the story quite nicely. I've really enjoyed this chapter :D And I'll definitely be coming back to R&R the next chapter :) Great work!

-teh

Author's Response: Hey dear!

Thank you so much for reviewing this and giving me your thoughts! I've always imagined Hogwarts to be bleak then and that everyone had to be involved in some way with the war. It wasn't just school anymore but they were each faced with the demons. The thing with the first war is that it seemed more chaotic than the second where Voldemort was so singularly focussed on killing Harry. That's definitely something I wanted to get across.

I'm also really pleased you like Sirius so far. I've always been wary of writing him because i dislike a lot of versions of him and writing him how i imagine him in my mind hasn't been easy. He is, as you say, complex. Inconsistent at times, unpredictable and that's how it's felt writing him.

Eleanor has been fun to write on the other hand. She is reckless, but she's scared too. More scared than any of them and the only thing that would push her into doing something reckless is when someone messes with the people she loves.

Thanks so much for the review!! It was absolutely lovely!


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