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Review:Jchrissy says:
Okay, I may have mentioned that, as a rule, I try super hard to avoid Marauders stories while writing mine. But obviously I couldn't resist checking out your new FF baby!

This kind of stuff makes me so insanely sad. Imagining the life the Marauders could have had, and should have. Imagining Sirius falling in love with a spunky brunette and realizing that he didn't want to let her go. All the memories these friends should have made together. Ugh :(

I think you did so awesome with the banter between James and Sirius. The 'friend' moments of the marauders are my favorite, so having the memory of how she'd first met Sirius with him and James perfume shopping for Lily was so, so sweet. I loved that Sirius was as flirty as ever, but that, after a long while, the fact that he really did just want to get to know Lydia came out and she agreed to go on a date with them.

I think you chose a really awesome moment to have him tell her the truth, too. Playing back into their first date (I can't believe he'd pretending he was a magician. HAHA) was such a good technique. It gave her something to base his claim on.

I also loved how clear you made it that, when he started talking about it all, he just got so excited. And he even managed a jab in at his mom! Perfect!

This was such a sweet start. You painted pictures really well with your descriptions, and I didn't notice any typos.

This is awesome start, Lauren! Congratulations on your new short story fan fiction baby :P!

Author's Response: Hello!

Gah - so sorry this has taken so long. I've got so behind on reviews and responses.

I'm honoured haha! I understand it must be hard for you - if it makes you feel any better this is only going to be a VERY short story though, although you might not like me very much by then end.

Oh, I know. I'm totally with you there. Anything Marauders makes me sad as I know any shread of happiness any of them have won't last. It's awful and I kind of felt mean writing it.

The James and Sirius bit was actually the first bit I wrote and the easiest actually. I really had fun with that. I was worried I was going to get to cliche with Sirius but I'm glad you didn't think so.

Again the magician thing was something for me to have fun with and I really did. I'd like to think it was something I'd do if I was a witch. I couldn't really imagine Sirius saying any other Muggle job either though. I'm really glad you liked it!

Oh - I'm really happy you enjoyed this though! Thank you so much for coming and reviewing, it really put a huge smile on my face!

Lauren :)


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