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Review:CambAngst says:
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Wow! Astoria Greengrass as a Hufflepuff. For pretty obvious reasons, I'd never considered any house other that Slytherin. At the same time, I don't see anything wrong with your choice. She's a completely blank slate in terms of canon, so you can put her wherever you like and make it work.

The qualities you gave her -- an earnest sort of eagerness, kindness, a friendly and welcoming disposition -- all fit perfectly in Hufflepuff. From the very beginning of the story, I loved the idea of her as a girl who's not only excited but also very comfortable with where she's about to be. It made perfect sense: her family is magical going back for generations, her father has told her all about the sorting and her sister is already at Hogwarts. There isn't much for her to be worried about.

She was so nice to the little girl who was afraid to step out of her boat. This girl is night and day compared to the way her sister is typically characterized and definitely not a thing like her future husband. I have to imagine that Draco would have pushed the little girl's boat back out into the lake if he thought nobody was looking.

Her dialog with the Sorting Hat sounded just about right. Nothing too deep or foreboding. She seems to have been a rather easy decision in the sense that she wasn't strongly attached to any particular house going in.

I didn't see a thing wrong with your writing. Everything flowed nicely and you had a good mix of dialog, narrative and exposition. No typos that I could see.

Nicely done!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for your lovely review.

I am glad you found my characterisation of Astoria to fit into Hufflepuff. She is a blank slate indeed so I gave her my own spin. I am pleased you liked the idea of her being excited about where she'd be and feel comfortable about the sorting.

Haha indeed, Astoria is different from her sister, and her future husband.

I am glad you liked the dialogue with Sorting, as I was afraid to over-do it.

Thank you so much for all your praise, I am glad you liked it all.

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