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Review:adluvshp says:
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I am glad to have returned to read this chapter. I am liking this story, your plot is interesting, and your narrative well-written.

I like your characterisations too, especially of Sirius and Thalia. This seems to be headed in a good in a good direction, and I like the way things seem to be going so far.

I liked the little details you put in, such as Sirius talking about how Pettigrew, though nowhere near perfect, was a good friend - it just makes you realize the irony that this "pathetic" Pettigrew would betray them in future. I also liked the inclusion of James and Lily and your depiction of their 'relationship' (if it can be called that).

I would suggest getting a beta though, as there are some 'technical' errors in the story. But apart from that, this seems like a good work and keep writing!

9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm glad that you're liking this story, as I know that you're not too keen on the Marauders era ;)

I'm glad that you liked the characterisation of the Sirius and Thalia, as they are the main characters, so it would be bad if you didn't like them ;)

Yes I tried to make Peter a little pathetic, but still a good friend, as it's so hard to make him look like a nice guy, considering what he did. Ahh James and Lily they're such fun to write, and their relationship is always great fun.

I did have a beta, but she seems to have gone AWOL as she hasn't responded to any of my messages for 2 1/2 months, so I think I've waited long enough now, and I'll probably get a new one soon:)

Thanks for the review!
-Kiana :D

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