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Review:CambAngst says:
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This story was very dark and painful, and I thought you handled it exceedingly well. There's obviously a strong AU aspect to the whole thing and as a reader I have no idea who Catherine is, but that really didn't matter in the end. You showed me just enough about her to make me realize her importance to Draco, how she led him to the light and redeemed him from his service to the Dark Lord. And in the end, his uncle took her away, and now he's broken.

The idea that Draco Malfoy -- whose family was so intent on embracing the supremacy of magic and the importance of pure magical blood -- would find himself alienated from his love of magic was really powerful. It set a tone that you were able to build on as you took us through his tormented memories.

The imagery of a young, carefree Draco playing with his friend, pursuing her as they swing higher and higher, was another great piece of the picture. Going from innocence to such deep darkness and despair provided stark relief for Draco's grief.

I really liked the idea of Draco killing his uncle to avenge her death. That act closed the circle and nothing felt incomplete. His work, in a sense, was done. He's reached a point where there's nothing more he can do besides join her.

The image of him having to retrieve his wand, it having been cast aside as too painful a reminder, completed things for me. He's now going to use it one last time to rejoin her.

Your writing was great in this. Your word choice and the flow of the narrative perfectly complemented the subject matter. I didn't see a single typo or grammatical problem.

Very nicely done!

Author's Response: Hey!

Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing!

I am pleased to hear that you think I handled this dark and painful story well - it was my first time attempting it! Yeah, there is an AU aspect but I wanted Catherine to be more of a symbol than a character which is why I didn't really develop her character much (hope that makes sense). Nevertheless, I am glad you think it worked anyway.

I wanted to play around with the idea of Draco sort of resenting magic - and it is good to know that the message came across.

I am glad you liked the young Draco playing on the swings memory as it was one of my favourite writing moments for the story.

Yes, I believed that he wouldnt have let his uncle live after what he did - as you said, then his work was done and now all he needs to do is join her. He lost his purpose in life, and so he shall join her.

Ah I am happy you noticed the significance of the little detail of him casting aside his wand and using it one last time - I put in some thought into it and its great that it completed things for you.

I am glad you liked my writing, word choice, and flow. Thank you so much for your wonderful review!


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