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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Its Gabbie here with your requested review and I'm sorry that it took a minute. I'm really glad to be reading this story again though, I was wondering what was going to happen next. Devlin isn't having an easy time being with his family and I really liked that you were showing it and his emotional reactions to Harry and Alex. Those are the sort of things that stood out to me in this chapter because I just know that he can't really handle it all. On Geoffery's end, I'm wondering just how he's going to handle being away from Devlin for this long and if he might try and see him. I liked the little bit we got with Remus but what a dumb thing for Geoffery to say! He got punched and for a good reason to! With the way Remus and Devlin had reacted to one another, and then hearing that, he was sort of asking for it. :p
What I really liked that was that Devlin himself was the one to really burst Harry's bubble. He was more than adamant that he would hate him if he knew how changed he was and him saying that he was no longer his son was just a powerful moment. Harry is letting his emotions control too much of his actions and i'm really starting to worry about that, I hope he'll be more careful. :(
Alex is still more wary and straight forward with Devlin than he is, though. I could actually sense that he liked her in this chapter and I'd like to see how that develops and if he'll grow closer to Emma.
But that ending! I'm not sure if I like it, I have the feeling that Devlin is going to do something or say something that will get him out of the house. You've got me curious on what he's going to do though and I'm sure that the crafty little thing is going to think of something really complex. :D
I think this was excellent and there are only like a few CC's that a quick proof read can change! Otherwise, it was great! :D
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: I'm glad this chapter expressed Devlin's feelings well enough - I was really pushing for that.

Geoffrey...well you'll just have to wait until the next chapter. He does know Devlin better than Potter. And yes, that was an extremely dumb thing to say, although I think he was being honest from an emotional stand point - he is wondering if Harry and Alex can handle the truth.

You really hit the nail on the head with this comment: "What I really liked that was that Devlin himself was the one to really burst Harry's bubble. He was more than adamant that he would hate him if he knew how changed he was and him saying that he was no longer his son was just a powerful moment." Because this is a snippet of what Devlin says in the next chapter: "€œYou don't know me enough to hate me. [...] You could hate me, I promise."
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I think Harry has always worn his emotions too visibly - hence his difficulty learning Occlumency. So I try to keep him too that. After all, it is his ability to love and feel those emotions that makes him different from Voldemort.

I think he already is really close to Emma, from his emotional perspective. He hints at the fact that he made a pact with Voldemort for HER - that he wouldn't run away, if Voldemort wouldn't hurt her. I think in his mind, he's done a lot for her she'll never understand.

I think it's clear enough to tell you he'll be sneaking out the back door. The question is wether he can get past the wards. Then again, we do know from Draco's scene that he escaped from Voldemort before, yes? ;) So...he must have some escapee experience.

I just finished up the next chapter - I had to rewrite the ending a few times to get it right. I really like Harry and Devlin's reactions in the upcoming chapter and think they each come to a bit of an epiphany about each other. But besides that, I just really enjoy writing Snape. ;)


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