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Review:CambAngst says:
Awesome! I thought there would be more to this Adri fellow than first impressions would indicate. It's obviously impossible to tell at such an early stage whether he's going to wind up being The One -- or whether he even has any interest -- but Pansy has set her sights on him and the game is on!

I like what this new determination is doing for her. She's finally trying to rebuild bridges with her coworkers. Nicola and Lesley seem moved enough by Pansy's loss to open themselves back up to her. Teresa seems like the most high school-ish of the bunch. And she has another great reason to avoid Cyril.

Wow, she really is starting to understand other people better, isn't she? This line in particular jumped out at me: "She could have told him that she had guessed his destinationóthere were no other departments on this floor, after allóbut she didnít want to. In some flash of intuition, she knew that he would be hurt by that comment, though he would try and play it off as a joke on his part, and she didnít want to hurt him." That is an amazing leap for Pansy. I think it's the first time she's been able to put herself into the mindset of anyone outside of her own social strata.

I love the way that she tries to pretend she's somewhere else while eating in the Ministry cafeteria. Classic Pansy. And actually sort of clever, too!

You've left me very curious, based on the ambiguous way that you wrote her conversation with Adri. He might really be interested in her at a personal level, dare we even imagine a romantic interest? Or he may simply have a professional interest in her point of view. Regardless, he's willing to actually approach her in a friendly way, so that's something.

In the end, she's still treating this a little too much like a research project and not quite enough like a basic human interaction, but she's learning. Even her reflection seems to approve.

I noticed a couple of typos as I was reading:

The sound of Adri Bennettís voice caused her to look of from her process of shuffling to the side to allow the occupants of the lift to exit. look up from her process?

Her family had immigrated to England shortly before the Second Wizarding World and hadnít had the means to leave the country when it broke out. - Second Wizarding War?

Otherwise, your writing was lovely as always!

Is it OK that I feel afraid for Pansy? I'd love to see this work out for her, but there's such a long way to go and it's fraught with peril. Until next time!

Author's Response: I'm so, so sorry for taking this long to respond to your fantastic review! But thank you for taking the time to review!

Yes, there definitely is more to Adri's role in the story than it first appeared...

I'm glad that you liked her new determination. She was in need of a bit of a refresher after the latest deterrents to it, wasn't she?

That sentence is one of my favourites for this chapter because it shows the progress she's made. At the start of the story, she may (and that's a possibility, not a certainty) have understood how others would react to her actions, but she wouldn't have cared if they were hurt by them, if their reactions didn't have negative repercussions for her. Now, she's withheld a comment simply because she knew that it would hurt Adri...

I'm glad that you liked that part! I don't think that Pansy could have managed to eat in the Ministry cafeteria yet without that coping mechanism.

You'll see more of Adri and his intentions very soon... Even as soon as the next chapter, I believe. :)

Thanks for pointing out those typos! I'll be sure to fix them!

Haha- I'm feeling very cautious and worried about Pansy myself! Thanks once again for your lovely review!


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