Iíve never read any Colin centered stories which seems a little odd, considering I have soft spot for him, so I was glad that I could read this story :)
I thought that you captured Collinís delight with the camera, excellently! The way he observed every piece of it, and saw it a much finer detail than everyone else, showed that he was a true photographer, and loved his art.
I was just wondering whether in this story Colinís Irish? As only the Irish tend to say Mam, and the rest say Mum. Itís not a criticism, just me wondering really, as in my head Collin was English.
I really loved how Colin wanted to capture everything, not just the perfect moments. I guess it showed that he knew life wasnít perfect, and that there were always blemishes in it. This is sort of reflected in his death really, as it was cruel that he was taken at such a young age, but nothingís perfect.
You have a knack for including little details, which make the story so much more special. I think it was most effective when Dennis was talking about how he could only remember snapshots. I think it was the fact that you included those details into his snap shot memories, made it somehow more poignant, and memorable. It shows that while you think youíre focusing on the bigger picture, itís the little things which stick in your mind.
The way you dealt with Collinís death brought tears to my eyes. Dennis seemed to be so blunt about it, and just the way he told Doris he was dead, and no further explanation. I thought it was great though, as it linked into the idea of Collin being a photographer, and his life ended as quickly, as photo is taken. The imagery you used to described his body, was so vivid, it will probably be stuck in my head all day, and make me cry!
I thought this was an amazing one-shot. It seemed to present so many new perspectives you never really think about. It also provoked so many emotions, I felt like I was on a rollercoaster throughout. I thought the choice of how to end it was great, as it was a relatively sorrowful one-shot, but you choose to end it when Collin was pure happiness. I thought it was good idea to do, as it showed that life isnít just trials and tribulations, but happier moments to! A definite 10/10!
Author's Response: Hiya Kiana!
Goodness, thanks for such a detailed review :D Aww...you've given me so so many compliments. I'm a little lost for words here!
I'm so glad that you liked this story, that the details worked for you. There wasn't much of a plot; it's more of a snapshot...a moment in Dennis's life when he's looking at a bunch of old photos, and the story sort of moves through vertical time, er...sort of going deeper into the moment rather than forward...I know I'm probably not making sense here but it's 2am and bah! I'm getting incoherent.
I didn't want to use too much figurative language for the moment describing Colin's death - it's just supposed to be blunt and somewhat flat. And judging by your reaction and your comments, I think it might've sort of worked :)
Baha! I researched about the 'Mam' thing before I started writing...I know Seamus says "mam" but I didn't know anything about Colin. Somehow Google told me that Mam is used by people living in the north of the UK. So i just sort of thought, cool! The Creeveys are northerners! Well, you're probably right that they're actually English! I have never been to the UK or to Europe before :)
Anyway, thanks so much once again for this lovely review! It's completely made my night and I'm so glad you liked the story!