I really liked that your story seems historically accurate, as Iíve read so many founders era stories, where youíre just left wondering, did that really happen? So itís such a delight to find that this story is historically believable, as thatís part of the success of founderís era stories. You also used British landmarks not that well known, I really like that, because as Iím a Brit, I get bored when people just choose the well-known places, but here I can tell youíve research places like Norfolk, or youíre a Brit as well!
Your description was great in this chapter, and really allowed you to envisage the scene before you, and now I just have images of peasants working in fields, in my mind!
I feel as if I know Venn Selwyn and his mother very well, and thatís considering that theyíve only just been mentioned. You can sense the family dilemma of Venn finding a wife, and I thought it was an interesting rule to include, as it does fit with the era. I was just wondering whether he was related to the death eater Selwyn, or whether that was just a coincidence.
I thought it was really interesting that you made Helena Ravenclaw exist, before Hogwarts had been founded as Iíve never seen that done before. She and Venn do seem like kindred spirits though, and I always like reading about people who rebel against the social protocol, so I can see it will be interesting to see how this continues.
I also love how you made Salazar, Vennís uncle as itís nice to learn about Salazarís possible family. It was also nice to see him portrayed as rather nice, as thereís always that temptation to make him out as an evil guy from the start, when Iím sure he wasnít always like that.
I thought this was an excellent chapter, and I feel as if Iím immersed in Medieval England! Youíve set a great start to the story, and Iím excited to see how it continues!
Author's Response: Haha, I'm only a wannabe Brit, so I'll just take that as a huge compliment! But yeah, I did do a lot of research about the modern day cities and towns that would be where the Founders each came from in the Potterverse. I'm happy you like the historical detail and that it keeps you interested.
Venn is meant to be related to the Death Eater. I guess you could say the latter Selwyn is an ancestor of a cousin or something. This idea of Venn needing to marry and yet not really wanting a wife will be a big part of his character development in these early chapters. Maybe Helena will change his mind...
Well, Hogwarts has been founded, it just doesn't play a big role directly in this story, since both Venn and Helena are out of school. You're right that both of them do rebel against the social protocol, but hopefully not in ways that are too grandiose or unrealistic given the era.
I always say that there are two sides to every story. I won't promise that Salazar will remain likeable, but for now, he's like a father figure for Venn. Their relationship will remain an important one as the main plot develops.
Thanks for another lovely review, and I hope to see you again soon for chapter three :)