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Review:teh tarik says:
Cassie ♥

This little piece made me so incredibly happy. You already know I adore The Fourth Daughter, and having this little companion oneshot about Godric's childhood and family was just an absolute treat. And it really is a lovely childhood. Your writing just radiated all the warmth and affection present in his family, especially with the little wooden figurines his father helps him make. You did a great job portraying a simple honest family working hard to make ends meet. And the image of Godric looking out at the sun over the castle both from his home in the woods and from his home near the stables is just so breathtaking - and it creates some lovely parallels in your story, too.

Your imagery is gorgeous here, and your language is just lovely and done perfectly. Gah! The ending is just too perfect. Now I want you to write another er...three oneshots on Godric baha! I lovelovelove the moment when his mother says, "My son working for the King! You'll be going by Sir Gryffindor soon! " This is just too sweeet, and of course, it's the perfect title for this little piece. You wrote child Godric so wonderfully!

Oh, just one thing...I think you might have a repeated part in the fourth paragraph:

As Godric grew older, he would stay up late, listening to his parents talking when they thought he was asleep. He heard them talking about what work he could do now that he was becoming a man. In the past
spent endless hours exploring the woods near his home, and would never get tired of seeing the way the sunlight filtered through the trees and hit the sparkling brook that ran alongside his family's cottage. He would run between the trees, and climb their tall branches, watching as the sun moved past the turrets and towers of the castle that stood above the kingdom that sat just beyond the forest where they lived.

Yeah, I think you made a mistake somewhere and ended up with half your first paragraph attached to the fourth paragraph. It's quite a big error so I had to point it out :)

Anyway, lovely work really! I can't wait for your next update of TFD :D

-teh

Author's Response: Hi teh!
Thank you so much for reading this and leaving such a wonderful review!!! I'm so glad you enjoyed this one-shot! I really like writing Godric, and I loved that he had such a happy childhood, and is so close with his family. It's a huge influence on him, and that's really what makes him the way he is in TFD. And Godric looking out his window watching the sun was an image that was really clear for me, and I'm so thrilled that you enjoyed it!
I can't thank you enough for all of your generous compliments, and am blushing and grinning because of how much you enjoyed this! I loved writing Godric's mother, and I love how she has so much love for her family.
The thing with the fourth paragraph was someting weird that my computer did when I was copying the story over to put it in the queue! Sorry about that! But it's all edited now, so if you want to read what was supposed to be there, it might make a little more sense :)
Thank you so, so much for this fabulous review, and for continuing to come back to TFD! It means the world to me!!!
Cassie :)

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