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Review:patronus_charm says:
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I really liked how you described Merope being pregnant, as Iíve never heard or thought about it, like the way you described it, so it was a pleasant surprise to find it like that, and it seemed to be very accurate.

Even though you werenít really introduced to Tom and Merope relationship, you still do feel for her when he leaves, and I know that she drugged him, but the fact that he leaves and she was pregnant must have hurt her a lot.

I really liked the idea of splitting the story into trimesters, as it was nice to see how much she changed from the start of her pregnancy to the end of it. It was also a good idea to do considering this is a one-shot and it allowed you to cover the key aspects of it, and not have to include everything.

Also the fact that you started each new segment with a description of how her pregnancy was affecting her was a really good idea, and I thought it allowed a new interesting perspective to the story, as people tend to focus on the emotional effects of it, not the physical affects.

I thought that you captured Meropeís desperation of trying to provide for her baby very well, you caught a real sense of the fact that if she didnít make certain sacrifices her and her baby would die. Itís an almost strange concept that you feel sympathetic to the woman who brought Voldemort to life.

I liked the idea that Merope would have been the one to give Voldemort a normal and perhaps happy life, which may have stopped him going down the path of destruction he chose.

I thought this was a great one-shot, and I found it very unique!

Author's Response: Hello there! Thanks for such a thoughtful review :) I'm really glad you thought this a unique story...it was written in a bit of a rush and I wasn't too inspired.

Yeah, I wanted to focus on the physical side of pregnancy - the idea of the changing body. Since I wrote this specially for the horror/dark challenge, I thought I might focus on descriptions of the flesh and things like that and hopefully make it a little...ahem...creepy. Baha! I probably failed in the creepiness area!

I think JKR herself mentioned it: if Merope hadn't died and instead raised Tom Riddle himself, he would have become a very different person.

I'm glad you managed to feel a little for Merope...that was one of my concerns for the story: that writing in this genre and focusing so much on language, tone, mood, description especially description of the body would sort of create a rift between the reader and the character. So your comments were really reassuring.

Thanks so much once again for your lovely review!

-teh


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