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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello again!

Ooh, another good chapter here. You've really got Brienne as a solid friend of Fred and George's now and it's great to see. I'm glad you brought in the Quidditch as obviously it's a big part of Fred and George and so it wouldn't be right if you hadn't. I love the addition of Brienne muttering French under her breath - it made me smile!

I was really happy you started introducing Brienne to some of the other 5th year Gryffindor girls - I think it's good for her to have some girly time! It was interesting to see the girls have also noticed the Brienne/George relationship build up. I would have thought it would have made Brienne think some more about it though maybe? She seemed to brush it off a bit too easily.

I'm so glad she laughed at last! I knew Fred and George would succeed in the end, even if it was at their expense. The water fight at the end was really sweet too. It was sad to see Brienne feel so guilty about having fun at the end though - it must be really hard for her though. I think you wrote her reaction well.

The one bit of CC I would perhaps give is that a few of the parts could maybe extended. the water fight for example and maybe the bit at the end. I think a few sentences could make all the difference.

Well done again :)
Lauren

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reviewing!

This is probably my weakest chapter, so thanks for the things you pointed out :) I want to make it as good as possible, so I'll definetely check out the things you said.

Yeah, there's a long road ahead for Brienne, grieving wise.

Thanks again!


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