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Review:patronus_charm says:
Yay another chapter!

I really liked how you showed that Seamus seemed eager to join the DA, and that he kept his galleon to prove so. I forgot about them, so it was nice to see them reappearing. I knew that Luna kept hers, as she never had any friends before, so any reminder of how she first got them, she would of course treasure, but Seamus keeping his surprised me, but it was a nice touch.

I really felt for Neville and his confidence issues. He just seemed so reluctant to lead the DA, but when in fact he would make a great leader, as he understands what itís like to be the underdog, and thatís what the DA really is. Also the mention about his silent bitterness that he would never get anyone like Ginny, you could see that he didnít like her still, but he was still a little hurt that he could never get someone like her.

I didnít expect a sorting song to appear, as Iíve been forced to write songs before, in music lessons, so I know how hard it can be, so this was another nice surprise. I thought it fitted well, and it could have been in the actual books, so you have great song writing skills!

It felt so weird being back in Hogwarts; it was so familiar yet different. I guess thatís how everyone there was feeling. I didnít notice it too much, until Neville and Seamus went back to their dorm, and the realisation hit in that there would be so few people back this year. I think you caught the atmosphere of what Hogwarts would have been like very well, as it left me feeling as if something was missing, and I just wanted Harry, Ron and Hermione to suddenly appear! Seamus and I are on the exact same wavelength, and I felt sorry for him as he appeared lost.

I thought this was another excellent chapter, and your characterisation is staying true to JK so it makes it such a pleasure to read. I canít wait to read the next chapter! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Ah, the Galleons. They are actually quite important to this story so I thought it would be good to have them mentioned nice and early. And it's a measure of where Seamus' loyalties really lie, isn't it?

I'm glad you liked my depiction of Neville and his confidence issues. From what he said to Harry in DH it sounded like he only started standing up to the Carrows because someone had to, and no one else seemed to be willing. I can't see him jumping at the opportunity to be their whipping boy, but accepting it as a necessary means to an end. So that will come.

Thank you too for saying that it felt like Hogwarts, though with something missing. That was, as you probably guessed, precisely what I was aiming for so it's very gratifying to hear it. Thanks again. *hugs*

cheers, Mel


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