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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello! Iím here with your review!

I think you have a little formatting issue, as the beginning of each paragraph is indented by quite a lot, I mean itís not bad, itís just a little distracting at times so you may want to fix that.

I liked the information about Hermioneís lessons on how to become Dracoís girlfriend, I was looking forward to them, as I thought they would be humorous and they were. I could see that you had put thought behind the reasoning of it all.

I think you wrote Draco well as well, and he did appear to be very haughty and cocky like you would expect him to be. One note on that you may be inclined to change his character to him being nice and caring immediately, but so many people do that and seems so unrealistic, so keep him like this for a while, so he can gradually transform.

I didnít realise that Draco didnít know it was Hermione who was ĎHaileyí, I thought that was actually a really good idea, and Iím excited to see how that may change things, and Dracoís opinion towards her.

One thing I did pick up on, was that you always tended to refer to Hermione by her name, that just seemed to stare out on the page, so perhaps use some different pronouns instead, just to mix it up a little.

Other than that I thought it was an interesting chapter:)

Author's Response: Patronus_charm,

Formatting in my BIGGEST issue on this site. Sigh... I will look into and see if I can figure out how to fiw it. :) Thank you for letting me know.

The lessons will be recurring throughout the chapters and in different ways. I glad you like it so far.

I plan on Draco being very annoying and self-righteous for a while longer. LOL but a tiger can't change his stripes overnight. No worries he will be haughty for a bit longer.

I was going to let Draco in on the secret but I thought this would be a bit more interesting. I'm glad you liked it.

I will definantly work on the "Hermione" issue.

Thank you again for the great review.


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