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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Wow! This is a powerful story, so much contained within a few hundred words. I loved reading some of your other one-shots, and when I saw that you had not one, but two Marauder-era ones, I had to read them. :D

Although there have been a number of Regulus stories posted these last few months, what sets yours apart is its depiction of the potion's effect on Regulus's mind. The contrast between the growing darkness of his memories and the fragmentation of his mind to that last apology perfectly reflects the repression the Sorting Hat spoke of. How much of his coldness and fearlessness was real, and how much was an act of self-protection? His behaviour in that last memory is entirely contradicted by his very presence in the cave, so when he thought about doing whatever he wanted and not caring about his brother, it sounds like he was merely trying to convince himself of those things. He's always been wearing a mask that others have given him - his parents, the Slytherins, Voldemort - and the act of ripping that mask away kills him.

Your interpretation of Regulus's character, and that of Sirius, is interesting, even refreshing. I really like the idea of Regulus transforming on the outside, while never quite doing so within. It's not that he was suddenly overcome with guilt or hatred - he always had that goodness inside of himself, and although he attempts to smother it, eventually it emerges. It's like a reversal of Jekyll and Hyde, though perhaps I'm reading too much into things. :P

The writing style is excellent, though I'm not sure about that second paragraph where you describe how Sirius's face is seared onto Regulus's consciousness: However, when his eyes are closed he could still see his brotherís face with the familiar arrogant smirk and cool, grey eyes. He wrenches his own grey eyes open but he can still see his brother. Something about it sounds awkward, especially in the second sentence, so it might be worth looking that over to see if you can improve the flow. Otherwise, it was a fantastic one-shot! I'm really glad to have had the opportunity to read more of your work. :D

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! :D

duhfbhdxjfhxjfhjxjh yoU LOVE MY ONE-SHOTS?!?!?! *faints*

Aww thank you for all your lovely comments, you're too lovely! :D

I didn't really understand the whole Jekyll and Hyde thing (from when I Googled it) but I'm hoping it's like a compliment or something. :p

ACK! I thought I fixed that! Gah, thank you so much for pointing that out! I'll fix that as soon as possible! :D

Thank you for reviewing my work, your compliments are just always lovely! :D


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