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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there! I'm Courtney, here for your requested review.

I never used to read a lot of dark fanfictions but lately I've been getting into them and this is certainly one of the best first chapters I've read for a while. It is very hooking and gripping and the language is absolutely spectacular. I especially like how you delve straight into the storyline, because it really gave me a sense of what this story is going to be about.

I loved Eleanor's thoughts in this chapter. They all seemed so raw and so real, and gave me a good sense of the type of person she is in a more unconventional way-without actually listing or describing the qualities of that character, which is an easy trap to fall into. I liked how she kept reflecting on her childhood, and days at Hogwarts. Not only did this give me a sense of the time this story is set in, but it also showed me how drastically things have changed for Eleanor, and made me curious to find out why.

The mood and tone of this chapter was excellent. There were so many little bits and pieces here and there that really sent shivers up my spine and told me this was going to be an excellent story, full of darkness and mystery. I think you've put you main character into a very unique and unpleasant situation, and I can't wait to find out why, and how she deals with this situation.

Eleanor seems like a good person to me, which makes me wonder what could possibly pull her to kill a man? What are her motives? Is she some sort of spy? Is that would enabled her to actually use Avada Kedavra?

As you can see, I have a ton of questions, which is great! It makes me even more curious to read the next chapter.

So far I'm really enjoying this story, and I definitely hope to read more.
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for stopping by and giving such a lovely review! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the first chapter! That's always one of the hardest bits, trying to chose the best place to start. I've played with a lot of different beginnings with this story and leaving this bit of the story a mystery however i've obviously chosen this way where the end, or the near end of the story be known before the beginning bit. I like the idea that questions will come when you see someone who seems good, who seems like they'd be anywhere but there being initiated because in the war i think it did happen. I think there were moments were lines between good and wrong were mixed and that it wasn't easy to be a dreamer and a member of the Order- there was so much else going on that i think someone could be made to turn this direction. Which is one of the things i wanted to explore here and answer exactly why she's here. She could be anything at this point, a spy, blackmailed, scared, someone who's just lost hope in everything. I like the idea that at the moment there isn't anything that directly says what she is or who she was other than the hints that you picked up on reading through.

I'm really happy that you enjoyed this chapter! Thank you so much for your wonderful review!


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