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Review:AlexFan says:
Right from the start, I could tell that Narcissa was a sweet child but she was being taught the pureblood ways. Despite that, she seemed really innocent and childish (as she should be) and I really liked that.

I loved the easy conversation between Lucius and Narcissa. You showed that they would really get along when they got married and that they would care for each other a lot.

Lucius seemed like a gentlemen but at the same time he gave off this vibe of being slightly arrogant. You could tell from his attitude that he was a rich kid and he knew it. Lucius is just so darn smooth! You somehow managed to make the whole arrogant and gentleman thing work but maybe that's just how purebloods roll.

The flow of the story was really great. I didn't even notice that I was finished reading until I got to the bottom of the page and saw the review box. Your writing style is also really lovely. You manage to add enough description but still managing to leave enough so that the reader can picture it in their head themselves.

The change in Lucius in part six was really evident. He went from being smooth and confident to serious and strict. It was a major change from how you showed him before but it made sense considering what was going on.

In the last part and in fact, throughout this entire one-shot, I could really tell that Narcissa loved her family dearly. It couldn't have been clearer.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this so great job on it!

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you liked Narcissa's portrayal from the beginning.

The conversation between Narcissa/Lucius was a little hard for me to write and it took three attempts before I felt it was okay so I am pleased you liked it.

I wasn't very sure of Lucius' characterisation but I am glad he got through to you as the arrogant gentleman (sort of), and it worked!

Wow, really? I was terribly concerned about the flow so its such a relief that you found it well, and that you also liked my writing style.

Yes, it was quite a serious change, wasn't it? But I guess the war would have changed him in a way.

I am glad that Narcissa's love for her family came through to you in the last part as well as throughout.

Thank you so much for your lovely comments!

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