Hello Iím here with you requested review!
You mentioned that Peony gave herself a finch pedicure, I was kind of confused by that, as I wasnít sure whether you meant a French pedicure, or whether this was an actual thing!
It was funny how easily Peony could be bribed into doing anything, as if she could be so easily won over by teacakes and peach marmalade, I dread to think what she would do if she was offered something extravagant as a diamond.
I liked this change in Peony and that she could now stand up against Roderick, and her internal alarm in her, it was nice to see that she was developing some mental strength. I liked her descriptions of the Ďrule breakersí, in her head. It was funny to see them all with a dismissive tone in her head, as weíre all so used to seeing them be good friends.
One quick thing, I thought Dean was in hiding for the whole of 7th year, so I was slightly confused about him being there.
Hahaha I loved that bit when Peony was talking to Arianna. The fact that she took off her underwear, I mean what would possess someone to strip in public? And then for Ginny and Luna to catch her off all people, I thought it was a great twist, and definitely put a spin on Mary-Sue!
I really loved that scene with her and Ginny and Luna afterwards it was nice to see that even though they are meant to enemies they could possibly be friends. I thought that bit about Luna and Neville seemed a bit OTT at first, then the idea grew on me as it seems like some sort of spontaneous kindness she would do!
I liked the bit at the end as well, and how she was trying to fight the thoughts about finding Draco attractive, it made me LOL in my head. You really have made her into a special character, and sheís just lovely and endearing. And also that twist at the end, I wasnít expecting that! Iím glad that she chose the good side instead of the bad, as she does seem to have a nice heart.
I thought this was a great chapter, and it had lots of twists, which I love. Peony really seems to be coming into her own in this chapter, and itís great to see. I just hope her first kiss is with Terrence ;)
Oh, haha! There isn't such a thing as a "finch pedicure". What I meant was that she was giving pedicures to her finches. Maybe I need to clarify that.
I don't know if Peony would do stuff for diamonds or not. That's an interesting proposition, though I'd caution you against propositioning Peony at the improper time.
Yeah, I fudged on Dean. Shhh! Don't tell anyone! I really loved writing the bit with Luna and Ginny. Gosh, people really don't cut Luna any slack, do they? Of course she'd be spontaneous like that. But hey, Luna is so difficult to nail down. I did my best.
I did try to make this as twisty as I could without breaking the Mary Sue mold. I'm glad you appreciated that! Thanks again for another great review!