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Review:adluvshp says:
Hi again! Here for your requested review. I am going to review as I read along this time, so I hope it doesn't come across as too incoherent!

Peony has a part-time yoga instructor?! Just what was lacking in Miss Perfect's life ;) And oh dear, the horrid situation where tea cakes would become unattainable and students addicted to them would need the passage, definitely a situation of dire need xP The bird goes with her underthings and Ariana wants to see them? I think I might just die of laughing so hard!

Oh dear, poor Peony. Her dreams of a kiss being like honey or candy or cherries or anything else romance-book-cliched are dashed! Ooh and now Miss perfect is going to get into some rule-breaking with Ginny and Luna yay :P

Peony got a whiff of Draco's awesome cologne! *giggle* "Theodore Nott had an alluring Iím-a-loner-and-I-like-to-appear-aloof vibe." I think I am going to die laughing. Peony, just kiss Draco already!!

*gasp* Draco has a dark mark! Peony's perfect world illusions are shattered! And then Rhoderick and Pansy! Oh the terrible has happened.

Lol. Anyway, if you didn't get it already, I enjoyed this chapter immensely. I loved the way things turned out. The ending was just awesome. I am eager to see the plot thicken further, though I understand that you need to have some of these totally humorous chapters too before getting to the main interesting parts. Good work though! Not overdone at all.

The grammar and all was pretty okay. The narrative was enjoyable, and the flow was smooth and nice! I love how you're using all these cliches too!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi there!

Poor Peony needs to make sure she's covered in case of an emergency. I'm sure she's just looking out for her future needs. She really will go to great lengths for herself, right? And people wondered why she was in Slytherin!

The main "interesting parts" are indeed coming up very soon. I tried to have some kind of cohesive plot as I went along with all the cliches. I'm glad you found the narrative and flow to be alright. I'm always nervous about that.

Thanks so much for continuing to read this insane story!


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