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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello! I’m here with you requested review, and yes I have noticed that you’ve responded to them, I enjoy reading them ;D

I loved all the Harry Potter mentions in this chapter, especially the part about Edie going as pale as they Grey Lady, and her using extendable ears. I was a little worried that there hadn’t been much magic related things in the story so far, apart from quidditch of course! So it was really nice to get the little mentions of it in this chapter. Ooh and the welcome witch, I’m guessing she’s the same one from before, due to her incredibly grumpy attitude.

I think that this word needs a – between the pre and the existing! – ‘preexisting’.

I seriously thought that Rose was going to get into trouble then, as it just seemed as if it was going to happen, with Edie listening in, and her being taken into another room. Then suddenly PLOT TWIST! I thought it was great though, and then Edie will get to see more of Oliver, as I’m guessing she’s going to have to write it.

I don’t even know how to describe that scene with Oliver and Edie in the hospital. It was just so awkward, but adorable, yet awkward, but insanely cute. Basically I was just a bundle of mixed emotions when reading that, and it was great as I love feeling like that, as then I really connect with the story!

Aw poor Edie! I feel so bad for her, as Oliver just seemed lovely there, and then she’s gone and written that article about him. I did really like that Oliver is finally showing his nice side, as I did really hope deep down that he had one. Wah! I don’t want him to read the article it would just ruin everything.

Then at the end. Another PLOT TWIST! Of course Edie being Edie had to crash into that woman, but I just expected her to fall down or do something as equally as embarrassing. But for Wood to go running after her. I think at the point my heart melted, n’aw they’re so cute and nothing’s really happened anyway!

I thought this chapter was excellent, there were so many plot twists, and it’s left me in a bundle of fluff! The only CC I can really give, is that it would be nice to see Edie’s article, and find out how bad it really is! Other than it was just amazing! Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hallo!

I added all of the HP mentions because a (very helpful) previous reviewer mentioned that my story didn't even seem to fit in the Potterverse. So I made some changes and I have to agree that it reads much better! And yes, the Welcome WItch I came across on the hp-lexicon when I was researching St. Mungo's. I forgot all about her!

Yace! I needed a way to get some more Ediver interactions in this story ;D And Edie definitely was a little quick to judge poor Oliver, but otherwise we would have no plot!

Thank you so very much for such a thoughtful review!


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