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Review:MissMdsty says:
Hello there! I'm here with the review you requested!

This is a very original idea, indeed. Having a witch from an isolated community rescued by an Auror. A modern day fairytale, perhaps? But I'm not jumping to conclusions. I read the summary!

There was a lot of detail in this first chapter, which I liked, since I felt like I really got to know this character and her past and as a result I understood her suffering. I can only image what growing up in such a closed society can do to a girl's head and discovering that her father wasn't the kind man she expected him to be is a very brutal wake-up call. In my mind, that's her spiritual loss of innocence.

I liked the flow of this chapter. There were no sudden pauses in the narrative, everything tied together nicely and there were no spelling or grammar mistakes I could pick up. The dialogue is very good, seeing as it is from a first person POV and she was undergoing a lot of stress. Everything about the way in which she perceives her surroundings is very well incorporated into the general atmosphere of the story.

I am curious as to why James Sirius would just want to marry her, as I am curious why he was chasing her father. There's a story there, I can feel it! A very interesting one! Also, how does Richard tie in with all of this?

Thank you so much for requesting this review, as I enjoyed reading this greatly. You're off to great start, I can't wait to see where you go with this story. Feel free to request again once you've updated.

Ral

P.S. I love your banner! It's so pretty!

Author's Response: Hey Ral! Thanks for the review =)

Im glad you liked it! Well I didn't really have a fairytale in mind but we will see

Richard has a very interesting part that he plays in the FF as you will see once the story moves on =)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Glad you like the banner


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