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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Gabbie! I’m here with your review!

I liked that you started with Draco’s thoughts as it made a nice change, and I always love getting the perspective of another character, as I hate not knowing what they’re thinking. As for his characterisation, I think his thoughts definitely captured his darkness and deepness, so yay for that!

Draco seems really keen to get Astoria, though I’m pretty sure it’s for evil reasons rather than romantic ones! I liked how you showed Pansy’s hurt at him leaving her, but hey she kind of brought into onto herself.

This line seemed a little old to me –‘ helpless woman being drug’, did you mean drunk, drugged or dragged, as I think that’s a typo! Also you mentioned Draco receiving spankings that sounded a little odd as well, as it gives off humorous connotations to me, and I think if you said beating it would sound better:)

It was interesting to learn about Draco’s childhood, as we don’t really much about it, and I liked the little snippet, as it helped me understand him more as a character.

I liked the little information thing on Astoria’s father as it meant we can learn about him in just a little bit. His family does seem to have a lot of suspicious deaths, so I wonder whether there’s something unusual going on there?

I liked the ending of this, and it hopefully means more Astoria/Blaise time, which I missed in this chapter, as there was only a brief mention about if from Draco. Though I did enjoying having his perspective though, so it was a win-lose situation I guess.

Another great chapter and I really enjoyed Draco’s POV, so hopefully it will feature again!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello!

Thanks for coming back, always nice getting your reviews you know. :3
I tried to switch up on Draco and Astoria's POV a bit in this story. I'd done it in chapters two and three for a brief moment but most of this chapter deals with Draco this time! :)
I don't like writing Draco sometimes, he can get a bit intense for me. But he's fun, as his thoughts are actually pretty deep! And I like getting a feel for him, its fun to play around with that when he's around Astoria.
Bwha, Draco isn't really the "romantic" type, he wants Astoria and that's about as far as his mind goes. He wants her more than anyone else and well, Pansy found that out the hard way, yes? :p
Drug, as in "drug across the floor" but I might go in and change it. Eventually. Probably. I can't say "beatings" on the site, actually, as it would be considered "child abuse" which is why I used spankings instead.
I think knowing that Draco's a spoiled little brat is more than enough sometimes but I think he's had other things happening in his life though.
Yeah, the Greengrass family has alot of weird little deaths, though only one of his siblings IS dead. That they know of, anyway. There's something more happening, of course.
There will be more Astoria/Blaise in the next few chapters, actually. And the Greengrass family reveals more about what they do for a living. :p If you weren't able to guess.
You won't see Draco for a while but when you do, you won't like it. Hahahha.
Thanks again!
Much love,
Gabbie


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