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Review:Jchrissy says:
Ohh what an awesome start! I'm a sucker for murder mysteries!

I like the way that you've written the style to reflect it all. Sort of like film noir. This as all surrounded around the death, around James finding Peach, and without adding a single ounce of dialogue in this you've made it feel incredibly personal.

I also like the small insertion of James vomiting. Even through the sort of hazy start you've given us, it's a good reminder that death has yet to tough any/all of them.

Then the dry sense of humor you included, the bit about a murder not being covered in the Head Boy handbook before you went on to inform us that the handbook did in fact exist, just perfectly complimented your style.

I also loved the line about rumors spreading like a game of Chinese Whispers. Not sure why, but it stuck out at me as pretty incredible.

I feel like we're playing a game of clue right now, and it's time to line all the suspects and the weapon up.

Really great start, and I hope you continue!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review Jami, you're awesome :D Oh there are going to be so many clues, whether they're helpful or not... *waggles eyebrows* is a different story ;)

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