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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there, m'dear!

This was such a creative setting for a one shot. Something about a group of teens being locked in a store, snowed in, is awesome. And I liked that you made a good point of why they couldn't apparate away. We all know you can't do magic in front of muggles, so it just fit perfectly. I love when a story has logical reasons behind things happening. Not only did you give us a setting that made sense but was still a lot of fun, but you really made it feel realistic with the reason they had left to the store in the first place.

I did feel like it was a bit dialogue heavy, but I think that can be balanced out well if you add in a few more details. I noticed that was already mentioned though, so I won't dwell on it.

Rose was very introverted, and having her be uncomfortable when Al left made a lot of sense. She knows her book, she comfortable with that, and here she is stuck with Scorpius.

I also think you made a really fun choice with here he led her. It gave you the chance to bring out a more playful side of Rose, and she desperately needed that :P

This was an adorable read! Like I said, more detail, and also your spacing is distracting. If you're having trouble with more spaces being created every time you edit and save, and you're already pasting as plain text, try formatting with the simple editor. There's a link for a guide on there that will show you how to do your italics and all that, and it eliminates the problem of unwanted spaces. If you do give that a try and get confused, you can PM me and I'll explain it more thoroughly :)!

Thanks for giving me some warm fuzzies on this Tuesday afternoon!

♥ Jami

Author's Response: OH MY GOODNESS I AM SO SO SORRY, I totally did not even see this review until now! Thank you so much for reviewing! I will deffenintly add in some more description and fix the formatting of my story!

Thanks again I really appreciated it! :)

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