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Review:MissMdsty says:
Hello! I'm here with your requested review!

Right from the start, I have to say I love the idea of a witch seeing ghosts that other magical folks can't see. It sets her aside from her peers and it gives the reader (me, in this case) a preview that things aren't going to be very normal with her. The main thing about these characters, the ones with special powers, is that it's very easy to turn them into Mary-Sues or Gary-Stues. But you avoided that from the very first part of that chapter, by showing us a teenage Albus Potter who doesn't like this girl. That, coupled with the fact that she admits there are things she is no good at (i.e. music) made her free of the Mary-Sue cliches from the start.

I really liked the description of the magical disease that took their mother. It was a very nice explanation, with sufficient detail for me to understand what had happened, without the whole event becoming the center of the chapter.

I like the dynamic between Rose and Ellie. Rose is one of my favorite NextGen characters (paired with Scorpius, of course) and I like how you've presented her as being so different from her mother, in the sense that she actually believes in Divination and seeing the future. Not something you see very often with this character.

Ellie is so funny! I love a witty and sarcastic teenage girl and she has plenty of wit and sarcasm. One particular line made me laugh out loud I could make things go bang by waving around a wooden stick, of course I was different. Brilliant!

The ending was very well written, because it keeps the general humor of the chapter while giving me a clue that something is indeed going to happen, and it's not the exams or Albus.

Lovely first chapter, m'dear! The writting flowed nicely, I couldn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes and the mood was (for the most part) light and funny, just like teenage stories are supposed to be!

Author's Response: Hello!

I'm super worried that Ellie will turn into a Mary Sue - or worse - an anti-Mary Sue! So I'm counting on you guys to let me know when things start to get out of hand!

Epidemics are really weird things to write about, I think. They scar a community in such profound ways, over such a short period of time, yet no one hardly ever talks about them. So yay for you liking the description!

Rose can only ever really be paired with Scorpius in my head. And she just has so much potential, personality wise!

And yes! Ellie's supposed to be sarcastic and have this uber-dry sense of humour, and I'm really glad that it's coming through! Her snarkiness can get the better of her, though!

No, indeed it is not exams or Albus that is going to happen, although, they may feature!

:D Thank you again for such a lovely review!


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