Hello there! I'm here with your requested review!
I've said this before and I will say it again, mainly because I know you'll forgive me for repeating myself. Reading something you wrote is such a treat for me. I know it will always be amazing and it will make me laugh and give me things to think about. This story was no exception.
Tonks is such an amazing character and her role in the books is too small. We needed to see more of her. What you've shown here is the picture of a woman that is a walking contradiction. She is smart, funny, magically gifted and talented, yet deep down she is a scared little girl that wants affection, that wants the man she loves to love her back. A scared girl with a language that'll give any man a run for his money.
What I saw in this story is something that made my heart warm up and by the end I was reduced to a mess of mushy feelings. That's love. It's true, honest to God, love. She changed species for him! Species! I actually don't really care whether metamorphs can change into animals or not, because you've painted such a beautiful picture of her attemp to get close to Remus, that I believed every last word of it.
The descriptions were amazing. I felt every bone in her body, every patch of fur growing (she doesn't have to shave and she gets to marry Remus? I have no words to describe how unfair that is!). You painted the picture of the wolf and his mate so well that I could even smell what she was smelling.
I know you said you wanted feedback on the first person POV. I have to say that a lot of other guys would envy you. You really managed to understand women! Joke aside, I do feel like you've created the perfect balance between the humor, the drama and the action in this story and you had Tonks go through all of these different emotions perfectly.
The last part of the dialogue really brought everything together. What was that saying? If you can make them laugh, you can make them do anything?
The story was very good, I enjoyed it so much (I might've let out an embarassing kind of fangirl squeal when I saw your name in the thread). Just the descriptions, the dialogue, the way in which you took us into her mind, all of these things put together made for a perfect piece! So, good job on this and I'm looking forward to reading more from you in a first-person POV!
Author's Response: Hi, there! Thanks so much for filling my request. I hope I speak for everyone when I say that I really appreciate people who are willing to offer up their time and thoughtfulness to the community.
I agree completely. Tonks was such an interesting character with so much potential, and I always felt like she got more than a little short-changed in the books. Of course, there were so many interesting minor characters in the HP world that JKR could have made the books three times as long as they were and still not given every character their due. That's part of what makes it so much fun to write fan fic.
Ha. I hadn't thought of it quite that way, but yes, she does change species for him. It is a pretty big deal. Very difficult and very painful. The canonality of it all is way up in the air, but I honestly stopped caring past a certain point. This is my take and I'm sticking with it!
Ha! Yes, I think being a metamorph gives Tonks all kinds of unfair advantages in life. I think you're the first reviewer who's ever said that they could smell what I was writing. I'm not sure whether to be flattered or not. ;)
So it was more than a little intimidating to try to write a female character from the first person PoV. I definitely had some help along the way from my beta reader and my pal Jami. But Tonks is so tomboyish that it made things a little easier. I would never in a million years attempt this with Fleur, for instance.
I thought that was important for Tonks and Remus to share a real, hearty, honest-to-goodness laugh. She's such a clown at heart and he's so grim and tormented that it seemed like the perfect expression of the two of them forming a true connection.
I'm really, really glad that you enjoyed it. It was fun to write and I really enjoyed taking Rosie's ideas about The Wolf having a separate and distinct personality from Remus and playing around with that a bit. I'm still working on plot sketches for my new first-person idea. Who knows when it will see the light of day. But now I feel much more encouraged to tackle it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!