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Review:CambAngst says:
KRUM!

I confess, ever since I read Goblet of Fire, when I see Krum's name, I think of Arnold Schwarzenegger in Conan the Barbarian muttering "CROM!" It's one of those little things I can never shake. Oh, wait, why am I here again?

Hi, there! Back again for another chapter. ;)

I thought this chapter was a really interesting mix of showing us how impulsive Rose can be as well as giving us a fun little peek into your thoughts on how the legal system of the wizarding world works. I'll save the former for a while and jump into the latter.

The way that you portrayed the wizarding legal system -- evening many years removed from the time of the books -- felt about right to me. The Wizengamot still seems to be a kangaroo court, focused more on appearances and outcomes than on procedure and the pursuit of actual justice. They're perfectly willing to toss Krum into prison for muggle-baiting, regardless of what other witnesses might have to say on the matter. It's sad that this would still be the case so long after Harry's sham trial for saving himself and Dudley from the Dementors, but entirely believable.

I thought it was interesting that Brooks also has no idea that Krum knew why Rose was at the pub. Whether or not Brooks's heart is in the right place, I think his step-father understands things a lot better than he realizes.

Your descriptions of the holding cells inside the Ministry were vivid and stark. The images of the metal doors that almost hermetically seal really stuck with me.

The Hit Wizard seems convinced that Krum is going to attack her. The way that she brushes aside his concerns adds a little more evidence of Rose's impulsive nature. And then they're face to face once again.

I love Rose's determination that Krum isn't going to get the better of her. There were so many places during there conversation where a less headstrong person might have backed off just a bit, but not Rose. She is fearless in the face of this man she barely knows who beat another man half to death in front of her less than 24 hours ago.

I'm kind of curious as to whether she really does want to write Krum's story or whether there's some other psychological urge here that she can't quite put a name to. But she's in, now. I can't wait to see where that decision takes her.

I did notice a few things that looked like typos as I was reading:

The small cafes and newsstands that lined either side of the long corridor were all closed up, not a shopkeeper in site. -- in sight.

“It won’t do any good,” Brooks said, removing the badge from his shirt and shoving into the pocket of his wrinkled suit jacket. -- shoving it into

They had traveled down several long hallways, entering an area of the Ministry Rose hadn’t visited before, and they were now standing outside a plane metal door. -- plain metal door.

Overall, though, your writing was splendid as usual.

I'm making progress, chapter by chapter. The temptation to just burn through the whole story without stopping to review is powerful, but I'm going to stick with this. Back again soon!

Author's Response: Putting characters in legal trouble has become a bit of a habit for me. I guess it's true you write what you know!

I'd like to think the wizarding courts would be better now than what Harry faced, but I can imagine the pendulum swinging too far the other way -- to over-compensate for rounding up muggles, they'd now be quick to clamp down on anyone who attacks muggles just to look tough. Also, it's always extra circus-y with celebrities. They seem to either get preferential treatment or else have the book thrown at them to avoid the appearance of the former. Anyway, I'm glad it felt okay to you here, especially since I really liked the court scene you depicted in CoB.

I'm so happy Rose's impulsiveness comes through here. She really is pretty level-headed most of the time, but there is something about Krum specifically that brings it out in her, which in turn draws Krum to her.

In my head, the urge that is driving Rose to do the book is a combination of her interest in Krum, who is so different from all the other people in her life, and just the simple desire to write again. She doesn't want to admit that she really is happiest when she's writing -- something Albus was trying to tell her in chapter three, and Hermione will remind her of down the road.

Thanks for another wonderful review. You should throw in more criticisms so I don't get too spoiled :P


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