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Review:MissMdsty says:
Hello there! I'm here with your requested review!

In your form you wanted to know if this was boring. Well my dear, this was anything but boring. I can honestly say it's one of the most original ideas I have ever come across.

In regards to the story, I found the beginning a big confusing. I understood that somebody was about to be married, at the Burrow and to a Potter. Then the flashbacks started and it took me a few minutes to finally understand what was really going on. Maybe it would help if you didn't call the OCs by their nicknames, so we would be able to follow the story better (instead of having the character refer to her sister as Vi, call her Violet).

It's going to be interesting to learn how James II took the news and how he willingly offered to marry this girl. I'm also quite curious as to who the triplets' parents are. Maybe Daphne Greengrass?

This first chapter set up the mood perfectly for what you described (very appropriately) as a rollercoaster. You have a lot of OCs that I'm curious how you will develop and how you will incorporate all of these different characters in the story.

One comment I want to make is the use of comas. Sometimes, I found it hard to follow a sentence because the comas were missing. It's nothing very big and a beta or an editor could help with it!

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you for doing this =)

I am glad you didn't find it boring. Ohh yah? I will try to fix the confusing part. It is explained in chp 3 which will be up soon so maybe that will help.

haha thats a good guess but I can't give it away :P

Thank you! I'll proofread the story to see where the problems might be haha

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