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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello :)

I thought it was about time I came and checked out some more of your fabulous work and couldn't resist reading about Fleur. I love the POV too! It really works well for this, giving it the detached feeling it needs.

The first few paragraphs draw you in so much and give such detail into Fleurs character. I love how much you show her love for Bill, the line 'You could have been widowed before you even said I do' just gave me chills. You also bring out the fighter in her though, she wouldn't change her life, even though she is in the middle of a war.

I'm was so hapy when I saw the paragraph about her intelligence too. Too many people write her as an air head just because she's part veela and beautiful and it really bugs me. She wasn't picked as a triwizard champion for nothing. I know she maybe didn't do as well in the tasks as she could have done but she still did amazingly well with what she faced. I should have known you'd have her character well though.

The descriptions and imagery you use are flawless in this. I could see everything that was happening as she runs through the castle fighting. Every shadow moving and every curse being fired. I felt as if I really was there running with her.

Again you bring the fighting and tough Fleur to the surface - not caring that she just killed someone. All that is important to her is her family. In this situation this is exactly how I'd expect someone to feel and you voice it beautifully.

Oh and the Weasleys still doubt her. I love how in the books she surprises everyone with how much she cares and what she does for her family. It's kind of sad that she sees them as her family yet they are still shocked by what she can do and what she actually does. You captured her personality perfectly though.

Oh poor Fred. As always I hate reading these sections - it always reminds me of the first time I read his death. I can't say I enjoyed reading it as that would be wrong for something so tragic but reading it from this POV was really interesting. Fleur feeling the loss but knowing nothing will compare to what her husband and in laws are feeling. I love that she becomes a big sister for Ginny though. If the GOF gave us anything about her character it's how good a big sister she really is.

The scene with Greyback was amazing. Again I could see everything happening so perfectly in my head. I love how as soon as she sees him she wants revenge for Bill and is clever about the way she goes about getting it. You build up the tension and suspense so well, even though I knew she had her wand I still felt my heart racing as I read on incase anything happened. This scene again is such a lovely display of the love and care Bill and Fleur have for each other. Bills cries to save her really got to me.

This is just another amazing piece of writing and I'm so so happy I came to read it! I'm not surprised you got first place!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi Lauren!! Sorry this response took so long ♥

This was my first try at second person, so I'll always feel a bit uncertain about it so thank you for saying that it works well ♥ I wrote it both in third and first, and they both sucked, haha. I think because second person almost gives it more of a poetic feel, and as dark as parts are, I still wanted it to have that kind of feeling. I'm not making sense... haha

I think she would be a very easy person to underestimate. She's beautiful so she must be weak, and I'm glad that you thought including her sort of fierceness and intelligence helped to capture her well ♥

I was really afraid to write Greyback up until the time actually came. Then he ended up just working well, probably because he doesn't have to talk much :P

I can't tell you how excited I am that you still got nervous! Eek! I really wanted to still have a lot of tension hanging around, despite the fact that we know Fleur has her wand.

Thank you so much for stopping by to review ♥ it's so awesome to see what you think of my different pieces, and the detail you put into these reviews is just such an incredible treat ♥

Thanks so much, m'dear!


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