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Review:adluvshp says:
Hi! Here for review tag from TGS!

Ah, this was such a short yet powerful story. I loved your plot concept, of Gellert loving Ariana.

Your writing style was very beautiful too, and I liked the glimpse you gave us into Gellert's mind. I would have liked to see a little of his power-obsessed side as well though.

However, the ending was incredibly sad, and I liked the way you ended it.

There were a couple of grammar errors though, which disrupted the flow for me a little.

For example, in this sentence, it seems like there is something missing- 'It with the frivolous things like happiness and love that brought about fear and darkness.'
Also, it should be 'conscience' and not 'conscious' in the first paragraph.
And then in the ending also, there should be a period/full stop after the "dear" and not a comma.

Besides that, this made for a nice original read. Good work!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thank you. Gellert was an interesting character to write and I'm glad that you liked it. yeah, i'll go and fix those up right now. thanks for pointing them out!

-Jasmine


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