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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi! Iím here with you requested review, and yay another chapter!

I really loved how Wood is still loyal to his Gryffindor quidditch team, as I have to agree they were pretty awesome! Iím glad that Pippa agrees with me on Ginny, sheís just too perfect, itís annoying! I liked how you made her every female playerís idol though, it made me laugh, how her and Harry are idolised differently.

Pippa is awesome again in this chapter; sheís just so eccentric, that whenever she appears, you know that youíre in for some laughs. She and Oliver are quite close, though it may be due to her being the only decent player on the team, but is it too early to wonder whether thereís any romance on the cards for those two. Though if she is Seamusís daughter, there must be a significant age gap between the two, so perhaps not!

I really liked your dialogue in this chapter, it was just fast paced, but not too fast that you got lost, and it always flowed well, and linked together well. I like that itís realistic and funny, so you can imagine yourself in that conversation as well.

I never really thought about why Oliver came back to Puddlemere, as I just assumed that he loved the team, and that his pure love for it, is what drove him back to it. It was nice to see that he had more depth though, and it was interesting finding more about his backstory. I would like to know more about the circumstances of it all, and the wife, as then will get to know Oliver better.

I thought when Oliver woke up at Kathyís flat that they had slept together or something like that, but I was glad to find that wasnít the case, as Iím still an Oliver/Pippa shipper at heart, even though Iím not sure whether it will happen.

I liked that you added a bit of backstory to Kathy as well, as that way sheís more memorable, and not just part of the team, itís nice that we learn a bit more about a certain character each chapter. Ooh so maybe that brown eyed boy isnít her son after all? I liked that you included that, as though itís primarily a humour novel, you still include some depth into it, which is great, as then you get the best of both worlds!

I thought it was another great chapter, and no CCís and I look forward to reading more :D

Author's Response: Eep! You review so fast! And for that I am eternally grateful :)

Yes, Oliver still remembers the 'good auld days' at Hogwarts! In my mind, Oliver is a very loyal, if not socially awkward person, so we will be seeing more of this!

I am actually one of those people that like Ginny (in both the books and the movies. . . .I'm sorry! I'm a romantic at heart!) but I always invisioned Pippa as someone who has got their head screwed on right and their feet firmly planted on the ground, it would be hard to pull the wool over her eyes, and she's not about to turn into a romantic sap, because that's just not who she is!

Oh I do love Pippa! She really is such fun to write, because she is just so. . . .zany and completely bonkers! I actually never thought of putting Oliver and Pippa together! But seeing as this story is writing itself so far, it could happen!

I'm glad you could follow the dialogue, because it felt a bit like. . . .word vomit in places! Just random people shouting out random things, and I was worried that people would get confused, so I'm glad it was readable!

Oh don't worry! I planned from the beginning that if there was going to be some romance in this chapter, that it would be subtle and not mish-mashed thrown together just for the sake of it! And I don't think Kathy's that kind of girl, especially seeing as she only met Oliver a few days previous!

We will be learning more about everyone as the chapters progress, but I will be focusing in on some more than others! And Pippa really seems to be stealing the show at the moment, so we will be seeing more of her!

Thank you again for such a wonderful review :D



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