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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for your requested review!

Aw, this was such a sad, and happy, fic at the same time. I almost wished that George's dream was not merely a dream, and it was all actually true. I loved the way you wrote the dream moments though, it had this humorous edge to him as George tried to figure out what was happening, and the way everything was happening. Dumbledore's scene was also quite funny, and I giggled at the part where Draco and Hermione are cuddling together. I think you wrote it all quite nicely. As for your concern about the flow, I think you dont need to be concerned at all, it flowed really smoothly. The transitions between different scenes were neat, and the ending also put everything in place without it coming across as abrupt.

The level of interest was very high, especially for me. I was hooked reading the entire time, and there wasn't a part which I found boring or draggy. I enjoyed it immensely.

George's characterisation was nicely done, it was quite realistic and natural, the way he behaved during the dream and after. I liked the way that even in the dream he seemed to know that it was all too good to be true - it is sad yeah but its correct. It all showed how much he really cared for his brother and missed him, and how much he wanted everything to be normal, yet he knew it wasn't really possible.

The other characters like Ron, Hermione, Fred, Draco etc. that made their brief appearances were also crafted well, and fit in nicely with the dream's happy times.

All in all, this made for a good read and the only CC I'd like to give you is that, maybe in the ending, explore and focus more on George's feelings. Add in a little more emotion on how much he missed Fred and how much he wanted everything to be normal. If you add in some more feelings in the ending, and then finish the story, it would be even nicer. Apart from that, this was good stuff and I liked it.



Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! The ending was the part I was most concerned about, it seemed a bit fast for me, so I'll definitely take your CC into consideration. Glad you liked it! :)

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