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Review:MissMdsty says:
I guess I should give you a proper review now that it's all said and done? Right, on with it!

First, I really liked how you started and ended this with the one word. That word can mean so many things to different people. For Harry it was his ticket home, to see his parents at last. For Ron, it was the rest of his life, with the girl he loves, rebuilding their lives together.

I guess at first I was shocked that this would be a story about Hogwarts with no Harry. But I can see that it was very good, even without him. The absence of the classic hero gave room to so many others to expand and be the men they knew they should be.

Bill, struggling to get his family to safety, Charlie, throwing himself in front of a wand for friendship and justice, even Draco, who in the end was just a child wanting his family and was willing to do anything for them. Even walk back into the lion's cage to ensure their safety.

Ron was really the central character of this story and I loved how conflicted he was, how focused he was, putting everything aside and concentrating on getting his last best friend to safety before anything else. Percy was a big surprise, playing a part in the death of the Dark Lord and showing at long last that he was indeed as brave as his family.

There are some characters that I would've liked to see more or see more talking about them, but I didn't, which is a shame. I'm talking about Ginny, or about people not really mentioning Neville's death.

This was a very interesting exercise of imagination and you pulled it off beautifully. The pace was just right, the pieces of the puzzle came together at the right moments and as for grammar and spelling, flawless as usual.

Congratulations to you for writting such an amazing story and I'm looking forward to reading more from you!

Ral

Author's Response: Never fear, your other reviews were proper enough. :3 And I know I've said it time and again, but I really am so, so pleased to have them. It thrills me to bits that you read the full story and left reviews on every single chapter, all in one go!

I liked that I got to end with "on" just as I started -- things seemed to come full circle that way. :) Writing a story where Harry dies is something I've wanted to do for a long time, and somehow I just... started writing it one night. The reaction I've got to Break Out has been absolutely tremendous. I couldn't have been more pleased for the world. ♥ (And just so you know, I love your analysis of the word, too!)

Ron was very much the central character of this story, and I adored writing him. He is brilliant, and you know, we owe J.K. Rowling so, so much for leaving these characters behind for us to explore! Even ones like Percy -- the sort that can jump up and surprise us at given moments. :)

I'm so happy you enjoyed this! I loved writing this story, and I do miss it sometimes. This was the first time I tried writing a mystery story where it WAS necessary for pieces to come together, and hearing that you thought I did it well it encouraging like you wouldn't believe. I've got vague swimming ideas for a mystery short story, and more than ideas for a murder mystery novel, so knowing that someone thinks I can handle the genre -- well, it's tops!

Thank you for being such a lovely and dedicated reviewer, and please know I truly, truly appreciate it. ♥ Looking forward to hopefully hearing more from you in the future!


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