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Review:teh tarik says:
Hiya! Oh, wow that's one captivating opening line!

You know life ain't normal when Regulus Black is standing in the middle of your neighbour’s kitchen.

I love your humorous portrayal of Regulus! And I'm glad it's Regulus rather than Sirius. It's such a mysterious but utterly frustrating visit - the things Regulus hints about, like how Ellie will be needing his help for the rest of the year. And instead of, you know, elaborating and providing information, he goes on to admire the kitchen tiling and whatnot. Gah! I adore how infuriating your Regulus is :D Hopefully he will be popping round a little more often in Ellie's life.

And oh, I love Ginny here :) She sounds a lot older and more mature, which is fitting, seeing as she's middle-aged and has three nearly grown up children. I love how motherly she is to Ellie and Chris, it certainly figures that she would take after Molly Weasley's habits of mothering people! But here Ginny is gentler and more thoughtful...I think it's a lovely depiction of her! To give watches on Ellie and Chris' birthday...that really does mean that she sees the twins as part of the Potter-Weasley family! That is rather surprising, and I do hope that you'll be showing us more on how Ellie interacts with and fits in with the Weasleys and Potters more!

Also, this second part of the chapter is a lovely change in atmosphere from the first part. With Regulus, there was some humour with his annoying self around, but in the second part, there was something warmer and more personal in the tone of Ellie's narration. I get the sense that Ellie does feel quite overwhelmed. And with good reason too. That was a wonderful gesture on the part of Ginny!

I would love to see more on Chris, and how the twins' relationship to each other are :) Hopefully more will be revealed in future chapters!

OK, this has been a very entertaining chapter :) Good luck with writing and keep at it. Cheers!

-teh

Author's Response: Hello!

Haha, that first line was a right pain to come up with, so I'm glad that you liked it!

I'm writing Sirius in another story, so I wanted to have a shot at Regulus. He's one of my favourite minor characters, so I wanted to see what he was going to be like! And I adore how he's turned out! And yes, he turns up more in Ellie's life!

Ginny I think, is a seriously underrated character, in part, I think because of her portrayal (or lack thereof) in the films. So, again, like with Regulus, I wanted to see how she'd turn out if I wrote her down. I've always thought she'd turn out a lot like Molly when she became a mother - especially with the whole adopting their kids' best friends!

I wanted to show another side of Ellie in the second half, and I'm happy that you liked it! So far, we've seen her as being this super sarcastic, snarky little thing, and I wanted to perhaps hint that there might be a little more to her than that!

And more Chris to come!


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