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Review:adluvshp says:
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I was pleased to read this another very fun-to-read chapter! The ridiculousness in this chapter really had me chuckling a lot and it was great how you threw in all the weirdness/randomness. I am really enjoying reading Terrence particularly xD And of course, Draco is really fun to read too. I love the way you have played around with his character and incorporated him into your plot. And then we have Peony too, her personality is so hilariously crazy in itself, its hard not to enjoy reading her (crazy in a good mary-sue way).

As I mentioned in my previous review (I think), its great that you are maintaining a balance between the humour in the story (or I should say, the parody side of the story) and the actual proper plot that stops the readers from getting bored, good work!

As for whether it is too over the top, nope definitely not. It is over-the-top yes, but in a very good way and if it were any less, the main parody element in your story would go away. I think you have really used so many cliches and mary-sue stuff in a very nice way, so keep going the way it is!

I am not sure what is up with the murder stuff, but it seems like an interesting mix to your crazy plot, so I'd say carry on with it ;) It seems to add an air of suspense to the story, and adds a little seriousness to the over all lightness of things, which is a superb original thing for a parody story like yours.

All in all, I really liked this chapter and I think so far I see the story going in a great direction. I didn't find any errors either, and I have nothing to criticise =)

9/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi there!

You are really a trooper for coming back and reviewing again. Thanks so much!

Draco the slimeball is what I was going for here. Also, Terrence the novice detective and Peony who defies all other description beyond perfectly perfect. Haha!

It's so good that you think I've maintained the intensity and balance so far in chapter 3. I keep fearing that every chapter has the potential to go down hill. MAry Sues can get tiresome very quickly.

Thanks so much for another review!


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