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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello! Laurenzo7321 here with your requested review!

I really loved this one shot. I loved how you took us through from when Narcissa was a young girl attending Hogwarts to the end of the war. In every stage you kept Narcissa so in character but just aged her and made her that bit more mature and a bit less naive and it was really great to read. I love that you didn't just keep her haughty and superior attitude constantly either, you showed a much softer side to her too.

Lucius and Draco were both well charcterised too when they came into it. Particularly Lucius, who didn't show any affection as such but in them few moments, you could tell what his family meant to him.

I think the seven moments you picked were perfect to tell the story of Lucius and Narcissa in this way. The whole thing had a lovely flow about it that made it a pleasure to read. I like that we hear everything from Narcissa POV, it really works well.

I also like that you made me really like the Malfoys here. They aren't perfect and they certainly don't show much affection but you can tell they care for each other and that's the important thing. They're also as relieved as everyone else in the last section.

I really enjoyed this one-shot though! Thanks for requesting it.

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am so glad that you liked this! I worked a lot on my characterisation and evolution of Narcissa, so its great to hear that you liked how I took her through various stages and crafted her.

I was very worried about Lucius' characterisation so I am relieved to hear that you found him well-characterised! And draco too!

I am glad to hear that you found it to flow well, liked Narcissa's POV, and the seven moments.

Its great to know that I made you like the Malfoys as that was my aim. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments!

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