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Review:potterfan310 says:
I really like this chapter as we get to see more of Ruby and what her and Al's relationship is like.

I didn't expect her little outburst as I didn't really see a problem with Al being late and there didn't seem to be any other reason why so maybe it's just the hormones.

Al and Ruby are really cute together and you can tell their in love and I can't wait to see how they react to finding out she's pregnant.

Ruby makes a scary pregnant person and if I was Al I wouldn't want to get on her bad side. Al is such a sweetie I mean who else would think about getting their wife pickles at stupid o'clock.

I really like this so far and I really like your charcterisation of Al and Ruby although I would like to know more about Ruby and her family.

There are a few little errors and one of the sentences didn't really flow:
"he patted her long red mane down, trying to calm her down."
Maybe lose the first 'down' and change it a little, perhaps like this:
"he patted her long red mane in an attempt to calm her down."

Looking forward to the next chapter to see what happens :D

Although your chapter are short and sweet they could be made longer so that more of the story line is incorperated rather than one thing happening per chapter.

8/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx

P.s This is going to bug me if I don't ask, but your Ruby on the banner has brown hair where as at the begining of this chapter you said "Ruby started to rant her long red hair flying around" and I'm a little confused, is she a red head or brunette?

Author's Response: Hey Soph! Thanks for the review!

I am glad you liked Ru and Al even though Al has no idea why Ru is acting like a deranged ghost haha.

Thanks for pointing out the grammar issue, I fixed it.

About Ru's family, well they aren't really mentioned in this since she doesn't really talk to them but they might be mentioned at a later time :P i was thinking of maybe writing like a prequel to this so we could actually see Ru and Al in action. She was his fan girl off course

Right sorry bout that! I couldn't actually find a red head and then somehow it just came out brown instead of red :( sorry!!


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