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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello Sam :) teh tarik here, reviewing your entry for the Apocalyptic Alternate Universe Challenge.

Wow, I think you've got off to a fantastic start :) From the first sentence, your story is gripping and filled with tension and mystery. It's a very dark and very intriguing prologue, and through the narrator's observations, you've give us details of his ruined surroundings.

These mysterious creatures are...scary. I was just guessing the whole time what they are - vampires, zombies, some hybrid between them...hopefully they are some sort of twisted breed of creatures which you've made up!

And the narrator is shrouded in mystery as well. I'm assuming he's wearing the Invisibility Cloak, and you've mentioned it belongs to his great-grandfather...would that be Harry? Or James Potter I? Or even James II or Albus? I love these little hints you've dropped!

What I think you've done really well in this very brief introduction is the way you've established the prevailing mood of terror and suspicion and despair, and that general sense that there is no escape. I think you've pretty much captured the atmosphere and tone of a post-apocalyptic world in your story.

I was hoping there would be further chapters validated by the time I got round to reviewing...but anyway, your story has got me so intrigued that I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for future chapters!

Great work, and thanks so much for participating :) The results will be out in a blog post once I finish reading and reviewing the other entries!

-teh

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