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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello AD :)

Oh, this is such a beautifully written piece. It begins with Narcissa as a child and ends with her and her family, still intact despite having gone through so much in the war. Your characterisation is just wonderful - from the beginning, Narcissa is very formal, and a little haughty as well, which is really in-character, and also reflects her rigid pureblood upbringing in the Black family very well. But she's not just cold and formal; you've also shown her more vulnerable side, as well as the softer and more affectionate aspects of her character.

Her relationship to Lucius is of course the main focus of the story, and you've done a great job in depicting this as well. You've shown how Lucius becomes that almost-inaccessible smirking older boy on the train to someone who breaks his heart open completely to her at the end. It's a very lovely moment, and you've written that final part very sensitively and gracefully.

I like the structure and segmentation of the story - it's a good way to show these different moments in Narcissa's life, and I think it's also especially effective in showing how time passes and how things change, both in Narcissa's internal world and in external wizarding society.

Another thing i really like is how you've portrayed the Malfoys in such a sympathetic light, despite Lucius and Draco being Death Eaters. Despite their affiliation with the Dark Lord, you've shown that they're still human, and that they still capable of the most human of emotions, including the deep love and affection the Malfoys have for each other.

Well, anyway, I think you've written a wonderful story here. I really enjoyed this :) I'm quite enjoying all your Lucius/Narcissa fics! I think you write this pairing really well! Cheers!

-teh

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am glad that you liked the piece, it is certainly something different from my usual stuff!

I am pleased to know that you liked Narcissa's characterisation, thank you for your lovely comments!

I was a little worried about how the relationship with Lucius came across, but its great to hear that you found it depicted well! I loved writing that final part so its awesome to hear that you liked it too.

Its a relief to hear that you like the structure and segmentation of the story, that is something I'll forever be concerned about, so thanks.

My aim was to gain a little sympathy for the Malfoys and I am happy I sort of achieved it.

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!


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