Hey! So ever since our swap I've been catching up on this story, and I thought it was probably time I actually reviewed it :) You're doing a fantastic job with this!
When I think about how to describe the experience of reading this story, the first word I think of is fun. Even when you describe the things Edie hates about her life, like her menial work and obnoxious boss, you aren't asking us to seriously pity her. Instead, her misfortunes me laugh in a "that's-so-true" kind of way, and I find myself rooting for her. You take the everyday things that make us want to scream, and put a funny twist on them. I think that must be why I find myself in a great mood after reading one of your chapters.
Oh, and I'm dying to see more of Theo. As the one bright spot in Edie's less-than-desirable work life, he's someone I want to get to know better. Plus, he sounds like he'd make a great love interest for her at some point, maybe? Oh well, I'll find out :)
I'm still amazed at the sheer amount of description you're able to give us, and yet I hardly ever feel a lag in the action. The coffee mug part was the only time I felt impatient to move on, and even then I wasn't that impatient because the image of that mug was so priceless :) I have a very short attention span, so I'm not a fan of wading through lots of description. But you've done a great job of holding my attention, which is an accomplishment, haha. Just know that some people like to get right to the action without all the scene-painting, and that's okay. You can't please everyone; just keep doing what you're doing, because it's working really well.
This was a great chapter! I love what you're doing with Edie, and the WW crew is so obnoxious that it's entertaining :) Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Thanks for taking the time to come back and review. :3
You're spot-on with your reaction to Edie's life. I made a conscious decision when the KC&CO plunnies were first appearing to make Edie's constant misfortune a joke. It would definitely be normal to feel sorry for her, but in a way that you can still laugh. One of my favorite quotations (by Robin Williams, which is weird) is "nothing is so bad that you can't laugh at it," and that's the feeling I wanted to achieve with this story!
Agh! You don't know how nice it is to see that this story puts readers in a good mood :'D
Theo does appear again in the story, although not until chapter ten. But he definitely has a ~*~super secret~*~ recurring role, and that's all I'll say about that ;3
The coffee mug was something I considered not including. I really didn't want Edie's narration to sound *too* conversational, and I think that it strays too far into her addressing the reader directly. I need to re-work it into the story, at a better time, because I too love the image of the mug, haha.
Thank you again, very much, for the review. I'm glad you pointed out that bit with the mug because I'd forgotten about it--I'll fix that on my next editing go-around!