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Review:adluvshp says:
Hello again! I am sad that this story didn't make it to the final round since its simply so awesome! Nevertheless, I give it the first prize for best written ship =)

Oh, and before I move on to the review, I want to say that the actor you chose for Godric is quite handsome xD

I liked this chapter a lot (I seemed to be saying this for all the chapters, but oh well). I loved the starting where Helga handles Mary, it really shows her motherly sweet side. That scene was really lovely. I also like how she mentions hard-work to be the key to success (sort of) since hard-work is one of the main traits of the Hufflepuff house in the books so its awesome how you utilised that as a trait in Helga.

The scene of Helga being "caged" was powerfully written and really struck a chord with me since you expressed her terror in such a powerful manner. The way Salazar sort of calmed her was really a nice touch, and I loved how she was able to feel almost secure because of him. Later, when he gave her his sort-of-apology, it was the best scene so far, as it showed such a human side of Salazar, and I really liked it. I hope to see this side of him more often - Helga is certainly bringing out the tenderness in him!

The ending scene made me sad of course, poor Helga. She has developed feelings for Salazar, and now Godric wants to tell their secret of them being Muggleborn, and if that happens Salazar might hate them. You wrote that scene nicely though, I love the way you write your dialogues.

All in all, another brilliant chapter. I am really enjoying the story and will come back tomorrow for more =)

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi again AD! Aww, I appreciate that so much! I was so thrilled to be nominated for the ship-off, especially with all the wonderful writers I was up against :)

And Chris Hemsworth! When I thought of who I'd want to play Godric, there was literally no other actor who came to mind.

I wanted to show Helga in a teacher's role at least a little of the time in this story, and I wanted her mother-hen side to really come out. I think she would take every student under her wing, but she'd have a soft spot for the Muggle-borns.

I'm glad you liked the cage scene! This was my first time writing fear, really (this story contains a lot of "firsts" for me), and I hoped it would be relatable. And the aftermath was fun to write because it was the first time Helga and Salazar really made a connection. And you're right; they definitely bring out different sides to each other :)

Helga and Godric both have some big decisions to make pretty soon, and sometimes they aren't quite on the same page. I'm so happy you like the dialogue, though, since that's something I've been working hard at.

Thank you so much for your thoughts, and for all your time. I'll try to respond to the rest of your reviews today (sorry I'm being so slow). But I so appreciate you coming by, once again! :)

--Maggie


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