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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for your requested review, and happy valentines review-a-thon =)

This was a very cute chapter, and I liked the way you portrayed the love and warmth between Albus and Ruby. Ruby's emotions seem to be all over the place and it was cute how Albus was confused about it and trying to handle it.

The over all narrative was nice, and I am liking your plot. Your pace of story seems to be a little slow though, so I'd suggest to make your chapters a little longer and focus on more than one event in one chapter, to not drag the story too much. Also, there were a couple of grammar/typo issues which I suggest you look at. But otherwise it was all pretty nicely written.

Good work! 8/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey AD,

glad you liked it! i will look at the typos and since its a short story its going to end really soon as well which is why it might seem really slow :P

thanks for reviewing!

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