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Review:Serendipity1234 says:
I really like this so far :) it's eventful and funny and April seems really cool! I'm looking forward to learning more about the other characters, too.
It does seem a bit choppy, though. Please don't take that the wrong way, I really do like it. It's fast paced, which is good, but some of the dialogue and things seem random. Maybe you could keep transitions in mind while you're writing. That would probably eliminate any awkward phrases!
I also really like Fred and Louis, who are hilarious. James confuses me a bit, as far as his motivations go, but I like him regardless. He seems sweet, if a bit femininely vain ;) and I hope we see more of Albus because he seemed really cool.
My favorite part so far was probably when April and Fred were bantering in the Great Hall.
Update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you for such an amazing review. I'm glad you enjoy my story. I do understand that the pace is fast but i don't really know what's random or awkward about it :D I'll sure try to make it better and post a chapter soon.
I'm glad you like the tiny bit of comedy in the story. I understand that I've portrayed James's character a bit confusingly in this story. It will clear up as his intentions open up.

Thanks again :D

~LoVe_Sirius


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